Yip’s Story
Yip felt the breath of life ebbing away. She had known sadness, known fear. She had felt the heat of many summers. Seen her young grow into warriors. A story teller she knew all the stories of the tribe. Her favourite was of how they used to hunt the red fish that gathered each spring, Beautiful beings that gave the tribe energy when it was most needed. Yip needed energy now, but the gods had sent ice instead. A wall of ice that glowed and burnt your skin. Ice that had killed the fish.
Footnote: This week’s prompt reminded me of the Ice Age !
It is indeed a stark, desolate image. Have an amazing year Michael.
Thank you for a great comment. It is appreciated.
Nice one chronicling passage of time and the ensuing degradation!
It is true the prompt took deep into history, one of the pleasures of writing for me. Thank you,
Well-constructed, Michael. An epic in 100 words
Thank you Neil, the photo prompt took me deep into the past.
Nice one! The end of a life and perhaps a people.
Great to read this comment, indeed it was the ending of a Neolithic tribe
You’ve started off the year with a very nicely written piece, Michael. Well done.
Thank you Sandra, I had to dig deep, to find this story, so your feedback is greatly appreciated.
If only Yip had the energy to head to the equater. Another animal drama, you give them a tough time.
Excellent ice age story… one can just imagine the lives of the aboriginals during this time. It must have been very terrifying.
It is hard to understand how the coming of a wall of ice must have seen to them. But I enjoyed how you tackled it with the stones being covered
I thought about the ice age too.. but decided for something else.
sad story, spring and the fish would come back someday, but by then it might be too late for her.
Thank you Plaridel, I was thinking of how the ice age effected the group of individuals we call Neanderthal
Nature is getting back at those who depend on her directly. All lives are being extinguished one after another.
Thank you Abhijit, I was wondering about the group of individuals we call Neanderthals and how they might view the coming of a Ice Age. As modern society certainly can not understand the so called climate change
The image did look like a wall of ice to me at first. Nice story.
Glad you liked it Piyali.
This is one of your best Michael. You are starting off the year with a bang.
Thank you for saying so Dale, If only I could can it !
Well… you just keep on doing what you’re doing.
Thank you Dale
Dear Michael,
This piece flowed well. I agree with Dale. It’s one of your best. I felt Yip’s energy failing and her dread of the wall of ice. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle, if only I could can whatever guided me when I was writing Yips story.
A sad and moving story and beautifully told. Individuals certainly suffer greatly when dramatic changes like that happen. Nature doesn’t care for individuals. Yip’s people will have to learn to fish in the sea or find deeper lakes to get their fish.
Thank you for such a nice comment, it was appreciated
A moving tale of the passage of time and Yip’s feelings of hopelessness. As the storyteller for the tribe, she knew their history and what life was like before. Nicely written!
So pleased to read your comment Brenda, it is appreciated.