Weighty Matters
It time to go Miss, the lord demands it. We will be traveling fast and light. Viya knew Karr meant she should take the merest of luggage. Well she could travel light, and she would relish getting out of the underground cage. She slipped the fine wooden needle down the side of her moccasins. She was ready. For the moment Karr had escaped the needles pain, but she would still had to face Einar and Arric. Karr had her wrists bound, and then groping her smiled, he believed the lord Einar would do more. Karr consoled himself, entertainers approached, they had better be good.
Footnote: Weighty Matters is a snippet from my developing novella: Dawn Rider.
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Dear Michael,
I’m a bit mystified as to what’s going on here. All the best on your novella.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Hi Rochelle, I am also mystified. I know is that Viya is being held captive, and that the entertainers are attempting to release her. but they arrive to late.
An escape. I got that. Some fighting to come. I think
Today I found myself writing another brief section of a story called Dawn Rider. It took over my original idea for this prompt which was to write a story about pressing flowers! Definitely some fighting to come, as I struggle to keep the Dawn Rider story from dominating my other writing.
Good luck!
I think that I am going to need it. Thank you Neil
She is intending harm to Lord Einar, right? Good tension built in these few words.
Hi Joe. The needle is for her protection, if Lord Einar attempts to molest her she will take his life. Each comments that I get clarifies my thoughts on the Dawn Rider story
Intriguing stuff, look forward to more.
Then I hope that inspiration helps me. Thank you Iain
This is one resourceful young woman, I think.
Then I have done my storytelling right. Thank you so much.
After reading all the comments I think I got it now.
Sorry my title could have been better, when I penned the title I had a very different story in mind!
Something is building nicely here.
Thank you Sandra, I do hope so.
Someone is going to bleed… if they aren’t careful.
I think that you may be right, time will tell. Thank you Magaly, the picture inspired several pieces of flash fiction for my note book.
Intriguing, great building of tension. I hope she succeeds.
I believe that she will, although I have yet to complete her story
A bit of intrigue in every sentence. Interesting take on the prompt.
Isadora
I am pleased that the feeling of intrigue came across. Thank you Isadora
This was an intriguing glimpse into another story.
I am so pleased to hear your comment. Thank you.
i’m a little curious as to what would happen next. 🙂
I am too, I really do hope that I can develope this story.
I had to read it twice. Just my opinion, but I think there should be a comma after “groping her, smiled,”
On my first read, I thought he was groping her smile. How silly of me. 🙂
Hi Russel, I think you are right, thank you for the feedback, I will insert the comma.
Intriguing story. She is determined and something tells me that she will escape.
There is a group of determined travellers trying to catch up with her and help her to escape, but as yet I have not penned whether they are successful in their aim.
Intriguing. looking forward …
Thank you Yarnspinner.
Intriguing Michael, although I feel ‘m missing something not fully understanding who the characters are, especially the entertainers. I like the brooding menace implied by the secreted needle
The entertainers are in reality a group of shape-shifters and warriors. Weighty Matters is a snippet from a novella that I am very slowly developing. They are on a quest which included them needing to free Viya. This part of the story is taking place in Scandinavia ad 550
Something is definitely building up. What, I’ve no clue but this can definitely be developed into something much larger!
Thank you Dale, even this author is unsure how this tale will pan out.
I wish I understood this.
Hi Dawn, There is a group of determined travellers [ masquerading as entertainers] trying to catch up with her and help her to escape. As yet I have not decided whether they will be successful in their aim. In my planned longer version the fate of a nation hangs on their succeeding. The story is set around ad 550.
Wow, I did not get any of that from reading your story! lol