Travelling in time
Sumer is beautiful, our underground home is full of sound, so many visit us. Long may Ishtar guide and protect us. …We are traveling, our home is made of poles and skins, lined with felt, father uses a lens from Nimrud to light our clay brazier, mother makes bread, I gather seeds and grind them. …
Byzantium is full of people, the smell of spices makes me dizzy, mother is to make honey cakes tonight. …
The sea is so cold, this wooden craft has taken us prisoners, we see monsters from the deep. May the painted people see our knowledge…
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I’m a big fan of using mythology in stories.
Using mythology can be challenging, but I enjoy the challenge of researching information. Thank you Neil
Excellent mythic atmosphere Michael, a great sense of journey.
Thank you Ian, it is snippet from a planned longer piece, centred around a three and a half thousand year journey
I agree with Neil, mythology is a tale well told!
Thank you Lorraine, history and mythology can come together to build interesting stories
Beautiful writing and a clever mix of myths.
Thank you, it is snippet from a planned longer piece, centred around a three and a half thousand year family journey
very atmospheric, well done, Michael.
Thank you Mason, it is snippet from a planned longer piece, centred around a three and a half thousand year journey
Good tale…interesting you used Assyrian civilisation as a model with the names.
Thank you Ain it is snippet from a planned longer piece, centred around a three and a half thousand year journey
Dear Michael
I felt like I was there smelling the dizzying spices. Well described travel through time.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle, I hope in time to expand each line, and then to travel with my characters right up to the present time.
Some lovely sensory description in your story, Michael. You’ve also captured a sense of movement. Nicely done.
I so much appreciate reading this comment, thank you Penny
You’ve hooked me! I want to read the whole story! Well done, Mchael.
Linda thank you. I intend to develop this flash story and travel forward in time, up to the present period.
So very well done, Michael. The descriptions brought me right there.
Thank you very much Dale,
i wonder what the future holds, but it’s kind of ominious.
There is a lot of her future still to be told, I hope
Michael,
You capture the migration of peoples, each with their tales of journeys past and present, with immediacy and a great sense of time and place. Amazing how you did this in only 100 words!
pax,
dora
Dora, I really appreciated your feedback, thank you
Lovely story. I like that you went back in time. If only we could know what our ancestors thought..
Courtney They must have had many challenges and dreams,
A wonderfully descriptive piece, there’s so much more unsaid.
So much unsaid, it felt like I should be able to turn each sentence into a chapter
I liked your take on the prompt.
Thank you Michael,
This was so so so well done! I want to hear more of their voices!
Thank you Na’ama, I also hope to hear more
Well done. I felt it all: the times, the place, the struggles.
I am so pleased to read your feedback, thank you
Not all can see.
Not all with eyes can appreciate after seeing.
Love the imagery- I love spices and honey cakes are so tempting!
Anita writing about history is a challenge, but it is one challenge that I enjoy
Great take on the prompt, Michael.