The Spanish Inn
As the lady walked by Ethan wondered could he make the conquest. It was strange that the challenge had been made by her husband, but the money deposited in Ethan’s account was very real. Ethan smiled, he was already looking forward to the challenge, unfrocking this lady would be fun. He rose and walked to join the family group, then joined in the ballad. Ethan wondered how long it would take to tempt her into one of his productions. Then he would suggest that they could rehearse at the Spanish Inn. He would invite her to his room. He was so sure of himself, why should he not be, it had worked before, with just a little force at the end. That woman had been just a child really; this older woman would suit his tastes more.
Today one month later he made his move. Forcing Elizabeth back into the bedroom took nearly all his strength. The knife took the rest. Elizabeth smiled, her sister had been revenged. William would deal with the body for her.
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Ohhh, I loved that word “defrocked.” I’m now scrambling for a reason to use it soon! Thank you for an entertaining story.
Thank you very much for your support. [I do hope you find a use for the word defrocked]. These days I think that the word is only used as a religious term! However I never could stick to the rules!
Oh, but you used it so suggestively that we had no trouble understanding your intention. Well done.
I am so pleased at this comment. Thank you Kecia
What a great twist at the end… the victor became the victim… excellent!
Thank you, Shivangi, I was also pleased by the manner in which the story developed as my fingers tapped on the key board.
I am glad it turned out so well
I loved the twist at the end! Sweet revenge! LOL! I’m happy that she got him in the end because he deserved it! Haha! Great story, Mike!!
Hi PJ, I was lucky with this story, it just developed. I am so grateful for your comments and your work in keeping FFfAWs alive. Thank you.
Your story evolved wonderfully! It is my pleasure to host the challenge Mike. 🙂 Thank you!
Great twist at the end, a cold and calculated revenge.
Elizabeth surprised me, in fact the story surprised me. Sometimes it is strange where the photo prompt carries one. Thank you for your on going support.
Great take with a wonderful twist at the end. He got what he deserved.
I was totally surprised by Elizabeth’s revenge, this was a story that just took me to her revenge. When later I rebooked at the prompt picture and saw the picture on the wall. I wondered was the picture her dead sister! if so he did get what he deserved.
What goes around comes around! Excellent.
My tale is called ‘One beautiful day’
That can be so true, I enjoyed your story which was almost like an introduction to mine: ie: the reason that Elizabeth took her revenge. I always read your stories and enjoy them, but I do not often find it easy to put the right words together to give feedback, it is one thing that I regret.
such passion between the lines, planning and waiting to execute revenge can be so nerve racking, so the suave character was portrayed very well. this was a seamless story of how things can shift in the blink of an eye!
Singledust you are very kind, I am so grateful for your feedback. I have always struggled to be able to give good quality feedback. To be able to do so is a real skill, which I sadly lack.
Thank you for the kind words Michael but no skill on my part – just sharing the feelings from reading your lovely story, the kind of story I wish I could write! Your feedback to me has always been sincere and always warms my heart.
That is kind of you.
A very engaging story with a super twist 🙂
Thank you so much Dahlia.
I wonder – how long had the woman planned to avenge her sister? Still, well done to both her and her husband.
Straight after her sister took her life rather than live with what happened. Thank you for your feedback, it is appreciated.
I did not see that twist coming, but it was definitely a satisfying one!
Also, here’s to the notebooks. Where would a writer be without them 😉
I would be lost without my note books: today I have written two introductions for short stories and made several notes of interest in them. If I recorded these items on my computer, I would most likely lose track of them! … I am grateful for your feedback on the Spanish Inn.
I shall also repeat …… great twist.
wow! i did not see that coming!!! glad to finally read your works, Michael! This is great!
Thank you Rosema
you’re welcome! 🙂
I can’t count the times I’ve used an idea or character from some notes to write a response to a prompt. Notebooks are fantastic. (Except when you lose them!)
Great story!
I once lost a notebook – never forgave myself. Now I always put a contact phone number inside the cover. Thank you for commenting.