Storm mulls over what she knows.
The three original entrances to Diamond had been created by Force, when the company set up its first Hydroelectric power plant. At that time they had used several existing entrances to underground waterfalls, but that was centuries ago. Over time the Force company had grown and now dominated earth. Force had gone on to create a vast network of mines linked by canals and supported by closed underground towns. Force had developed an subterranean world that mirrored the surface of twenty second century earth. With out the telepathic link to Issy there would be no hope of ever finding her. But find Issy she must before Force sent Issy to work at the volcanic heat pump plant. For the link between Storm and Issy was more than telepathic, it was total. What one felt the other experienced. The Force organisation had grown strong over the centuries using these genetically developed link. Now Force had created a new form of psychic power, and now wanted rid of thinking compassionate individuals like Storm and Issy.
Seems like you’ve got a lot of cool world-building in here, that maybe it’s part of a much larger story — interesting! But I’ll confess that I’m a bit confused about what’s happening and who’s who…
Sorry Joy, it doe fit into a much larger story, which is dominating my thoughts at the moment. I do all to often forget that my readers have not access to the whole story. Mike
I often forget that my readers can’t read my mind. How annoying of them, ha ha!
I had to smile at your comment, thank you Joy
Love the idea of an identical world operating underground. Force sounds like a force to be reckoned with. Suggestion – In the sentence without the telepathic connection to Issy – change the second Issy to her. Three Issy’s in close succession sounds clunky and repetitious (to me at least). Good story and will look forward to reading the full story.
Irene, you are right. Thank you Irene
OH no, it doesn’t look good for Storm and Issy! Force is a company that needs to be reckoned with! Great story, Mike!
I am not sure how this story may develope, but one thing is sure, I am struck with it for a while. Thank you PJ.
LOL!
Thank you so much PJ
Ominous. There are a couple of typos that you might want to look at Michael. For example, in the line starting with ‘Without’, there is an extra ‘out’ following it immediately.
Sadly sometimes my fingers run faster than my mind. I was pleased you let me know. It is often months later when I print my stories out, that spell checker pulls me up.
Looking forward to more about Storm and Issy.
Hi yarnspinnerr, I did set out this Wednesday to write about Storm and Issy. My idea being about being watched by the camera. But I felt guilty writing a sequel. However I have just commissioned a new web site, where I plan to compile two novels, one of which hopefully will be about the Force’s treatment of Storm and Issy.
Shall look forward to it. 🙂
I’m happy to read that you plan to explore these characters. Will look for your new blog.
Ellespeth
Thank you Ellespeth. Regarding my new writing web pages, they will at first not be accessible/viewable. However I will be pleased to mail you once they are viewable. Michael