My letter home
Apartment 2119
Finkah
Nepal
Dear Daughter
I need to update you on events here, I am setting out on a journey, starting with a retreat in Finkah at my local monastery. They have isolated huts set within a gorge full of flowers. There I will review my life’s work. It may be like looking into a mirror. I expect the images I see, may not be to my liking. As you know my mantra has been to ensure that the path I follow has been improved when I pass. So I must ask forgiveness from you, for what is to follow.
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Intriguing, Michael
Thank you Neil, intriguing and worrying.
Sounds worrying.
Thank you Susan. I agree that this letter could be see as worrying.
Makes me really wonder what is to follow.
I am also wondering, Alice, I appreciated you taking the time to comment.
I like the idea of a retreat to contemplate.
Iain. Retreats can be good, but in this case I am wondering if there is another reason for the retreat.
There is a powerful sense of isolation here. The physical separation of the huts. The solitary review of the father’s life and a possible disconnect between him and his daughter. The letter has been written. I wonder if it has been sent . . . It seems unfinished, as if the father could say no more. A heart-rending account, Michael.
So pleased to read your comment, Edith. As I was concerned that the feeling of isolation might not be clear enough… I rather struggled to stay within the word count. Historically I have not been a letter writer, so this week I decided to challenge myself. I left the letter unfinished for quite a few reasons, mainly however as I felt there may more to come.
This has a rather ominous feel to it. Good job of leaving us hanging 🙂
Very nice way of using the photo prompt. I liked the message. Introspection is like looking into a mirror. Beautiful!
I am pleased to read ominous, thank you granonine
Oh, dear! I fear for your MC, wonder what he has planned and what has happened through his life to drive him here. Well written Michael
I am asking the same questions, and do not know if I will get a response. Thank you Lynn
My pleasure
This does not bode well I fear.. I wonder….
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Ha ha, I wondered also. Good to see you back,
Exploring one;s psyche is a dangerous business.
That is true, although whether that is what he is up to, I don’t know, as so far this character is not co-operating.
Dear Michael,
Thoughtful and Evocative. Nicely done. I can’t help wonder what’s to follow.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I also wonder that, but so far this character is rather silence, which is a pity. I was looking forward to exploring Nepal
I definitely got a sense of separation and impending doom from the unfinished letter. Well done.
Thank you Jill I did find myself wondering if he had to flee before the letter was complete.
The idea of reflecting on one’s life in an isolated place of beauty sounds rather attractive – at first. Then you show us the man’s apprehension, and his fear that he has fallen short of his (admirable) mantra. What has happened to shake his confidence in how he’s lived his life, I wonder?
Penny although my character seems to know what he is about, I must admit that I am rather unsure at present what is going to happen to him and his daughter
I really liked this, Michael. He is ready to face whatever he has done or seen so that he may move forward…
So pleased to read your feedback Dale. I must admit that at present I am unsure what is about to occur in this characters life.
Two things I noticed: First, that he focussed on his mantra “to improve” things around him. This could be a do-gooder’s mantra, or a dictator’s.
Second, that he is asking forgiveness in advance, for something he is about to do, which will somehow improve the path (presumably), perhaps make up for past deeds, but also harm or emotionally crush or disappoint the daughter. My bet is, he’s changing his will.
Hi Andrea, I was pleased to read your feedback, which was in line with how at first I saw this story developing. However now I find myself wondering about why he sent a primitive drawing to his daughter with the letter. Which may mean that there could be another angle to the story. Time and the next prompt may deliver the answer, I hope so
Very intriguing.
Intriguing will do for me, thank you.
I hope that he can find things that make it better for his daughter.
Thank you for commenting Bjorn, sadly I am confused as to how this particular story may pan out
Interesting little missal here. Am intrigued and want to know more.
Thank you Jelli. It does seem that this story is developing along the lines of a rubric. I myself am quite unsure if and how it might develop.
Oh dear, what is to come? Love the little picture too.
Thank you, more is on the way.
An intriguing letter – begging the question of what he might write at the end of his retreat.
Thank you, Sarah Ann. You have set me a task at some piont I fear.