I feel your touch
I feel your touch. I may not have sight but I trust you. I desire that those who can see me, know something about earth’s past. We may have to live out our lives in the mines, since the aliens arrived. They may have blinded us and driven us underground, but our children see… I feel your touch my love. I trust your hands. Go ahead and tattoo all over on my skin. Despite your sightless eyes my love. I crave forests with leaves and colourful blossom. That the children may see and know trees.
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I’m not a big fan generally of alien invasion, but I loved the relationship here
I was pleased to read your feedback Neil as it was a trusting relationship which took over this piece of flash. With hindsight if I had given myself more time, I might have gone down a environmental disaster route rather then an alien invasion
Such a sweet piece & so tragic that humans are stuck in the dank underground mines for the aliens. Being without Nature and sunlight would drive me crazy! I love the hens though about his lover and her touch, tattooing his skin with nature and his memmories of it. Well written!
I was so pleased to read your feedback. Without sunlight I would also be crazy. Thank you Mandibelle
A great sense of yearning in this story. “That the children may see and know trees.” Lovely turn of phrase.
Thank you so much Jilly
How long before the aliens decide enough is enough and flush us out?
Hopefully we may be ready for them. But so far I have not discovered how we will defeat them.
One day we will get our revenge against the aliens.
So far my muse has not discovered how we will defeat them.
Lovely piece, full of sentiment.
Thank you for your kind comment, it is appreciated.
Nicely done Michael. Very touching.
Thank you for your kind comment, it is appreciated
Delightfully different Michael
Thank you Keith, I appreciate this comment.
A very beautiful voice in this piece. Well done, Michael.
Sandra I really appreciate your comment. Thank you so much.
Dear Michael,
I love the voice and the sentiment in this piece. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
PS I have to be the grammar police on this one. Life’s should be lives. (Life’s is possessive not plural)
I am so pleased to read your feedback Rochelle… At times I just can not handle grammar, so I will always appreciate your help .
And leafs should be leaves. 😉
The craving to see the forests and colourful blossoms is touching and sincere!
Thank you Abhijit
Glad you caught the grammar mistake, Rochelle. I always feel bad about pointing them out 🙂
The emotion, sadness, nostalgia literally drenches this piece. Excellent writing.
Grammar has always been one of my two Achilles heels. Do let me know about any mistakes. I usual print my flash post after a couple of months, and then I am frustrated at the mistakes I notice at that piont in time. Thank you granonine for taking the time to comment and for your support.
The gentleness, kindness and thoughtfulness of these two comes through in spades. So nicely done.
Thank you so much Alicia.
A beautiful story of yearning, love, and trust. It’s a testament to the indomitable human spirit. Well written!
Thank you Brenda for your lovely comment. I must admit that this story has grown on me. …
This was a beautiful piece, Michael.
Thank you Dale. It was a story that needed its grammar correcting. Credit to feedback comments.
Oh, I’ve decided to leave your grammar alone now, Michael 😉
For your information, there is a site called “Grammarly” that you could use. It is very good…
Please Dale do not fear about letting me know about grammar mistakes. I have ‘never’ been able to understand the rules of grammar. I am now going to look at the site you recommend. Thank you Dale
Once installed on your computer, it automatically starts working for you… I use it myself.
Wonderful relationship. So sweet.
So pleased to read your comment, thank you.
Like Neil I don’t go a bundle on alien invasion but at the end of everything it doesn’t matter how the story is set, if the emotions are as well drawn as they are here
Thank you for taking the time to comment Micheal. I was pleased to read about the your book. Good work
Thanks Michael