Flotsam 1948
Judy loved walking the beach, today she loved the harsh wind, it was keeping people at home so she had the beach to herself. Judy enjoyed the isolation it was her time to think, to dream and plan, she really needed inspiration today. Her publisher wanted a outline for her next story, ‘two novels a year Judy, it keeps your readers engaged’. She could hear him now, but all she wanted today was to clear the flotsam out of her mind. Then the images came fast, as her life flashed before her. A mine had removed her leg.
Footnote
Undertaking research for this story I was once again reminded of the horrors of strife, around the world every day people are dying due to abandoned land mines. It is bizarre where a picture will take you.
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I was more surprised than she was by the mine
It surprised me to, i was thinking of her being out looking for amber. Then the land mine arrived. It was not in my original idea for this story.
Dear Michael,
Wow. No wonder she wanted some time to herself.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I was surprised by the outcome of this story, my original idea was to write about someone out beach combing for Amber.
Loved the ‘flotsam of her mind’, and of course that she was a writer looking for some peace and quiet. Shocking twist at the end. Well written.
Thank you for taking the time to give feed back, its appreciated, and thanks for the kind comments. Mike
That was an unexpected last line!
I think I can safely say there will be few stories along this line this week. What a surprise that was!
Heartbreaking last line.
Landmines are heartbreaking, thank you for taking the time to comment it is appreciated
What a shocker! Imagine that, trying to find a peace of mind just to end up like that.
You lulled us into a false sense of security and then BOOM! Well done.
That was a shocker. Poor woman, daydreaming and then her life is changed forever. Well written tale, Michael
It’s interesting where a writer’s mind takes them. I can’t say I “like” where it took yours, but it made for a powerful piece.
Ouch
Truly shocking and effective last line, well done
Ye gods – that was a shocker of a last line!
Landmines are shockingly indiscriminate things.
Uh, that was unexpected and painful…
I love beach walking, each day there are people and children maimed and killed by these indiscriminate mines. Dreadful
Thank you for taking the time to comment, it is appreciated, landmines are dreadful indiscriminate things.
That was an unexpected twist!
Boom is right!
Thank you Dale, Landmines are dreadful things
That was surprise ending alright 😉
Hi Helen, good to hear from you, sadly landmines are dreadful things.
I really enjoy seeing the different places people go with the picture. I also enjoy it when the story makes a point. Good job!
Thank you so much Symanntha,
A sad reminder… a topic for her next book should be easy though.
If she survives she will become a great author .
the ending was a complete surprise. nicely done.
It surprised me too.
Unexpected, shocking and very powerful. Great writing, Michael.
I was pleased with the simplicity of this story, but i was even more pleased to get your view on Flotsam 1948
The end was unexpected. It’s amazing how a picture of random stuff takes you to abandoned land mines. Nicely done.
The end surprised me to. Mike
I felt her stress but was then surprised where this went.
I was also surprised, I do appreciate your comments, Mike
I was in a dreamy beach state of mind and then you gave us that power line at the end, Michael.
Super write …
Isadora
Sorry Isadora, .
An interesting journey in this story! Poor Judy, lost in the midst of her moment of stress. A good reminder for us in the note you added about mines.
Thank you Emily. Sadly the ability to roam safely is decreasing.