Early Arrivals
This week’s photo prompt prompted me to write two rather differing stories. Any feed back would be welcome.
The cafe attracted the young and avant-grade. The bulk of its business came from day trippers. Yesterday’s incident was disastrous. If only Johanna had not run amok with a rifle, the visitors had posed no threat to her, yes their appearance was a surprise. They have never arrived in August before, Johanna had shot and killed them. The two fields that constituted her small holding were littered with bodies.
Thirty greylag geese lay dead amongst the corn. They found Johanna slumped in a armchair, she had turned the rifle on herself. On the table next to her was a letter from the mayor, informing her that her land was required for an extraction site. The residents of the town had voted to take the government bribes, two thousand pounds each and a lump sum for the council. It was expected that the fracking would release vast amounts of gas.
The media had run with the story on the six o’clock news, visitor numbers to the town crashed, and the fracking company decide not to proceed.
Johanna thought they were taking her land from her so she shot and killed people then killed herself? Wow, pretty heavy! The kicker is in the end when they decided not to take the land after all. Great story!
Nice twist at the end. Preferred this of your 2 efforts, well written and a dark, cautionary tale. Nice one!
Ooh you wrote two stories for the prompt, and I love that they’re both so different. Can’t say which one I prefer; this one definitely takes a darker side to things.
Thank you, I do find it interesting what the prompt brings out in writers.
so different from the other piece of the same prompt….this is like a page out of a mystery novel
I often want to write more when writing a piece of flash fiction. Thank you for your kind comment. Mike
That was quite terrible of Johañna and at the end the deal still fell apart.
Johanna family had cared for the land for generations, she could face losing it. Fate.
For her it must have felt like losing not just her livelihood but her entire family.
That is very true, it was a very bad for the tribe.