Dreams
Plain white sheets harvest a dream, a love child will be born whilst we dream. As soft music played little did we know dreams can be broken.
Now I lay alone whilst listening to Radio Caroline …
In my head, I compose hard rock.
Musicians around the world beware of broken dreams.
Do not let your legacy be strident, learn the rules of life. We arrive, we depart. In between play good music. Let your legacy be told. Be that in fine music or written prose.
When Fridays arrive let the words tell your stories, whether musical or not.
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The opening is magical
Magical will do fine for me, thank you so much Neil
I agree. A cracker of an opening line.
Lovely to read your feedback, thank you so much Sandra.
Dear Michael,
Well told life lesson. However “Friday’s” should be simply “Fridays.” Friday’s means that something belongs to Friday.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle, if only you could be my editor… I have now corrected my incorrect prompt picture
In between play good music – I like that Michael!
It was good to get the varying feedback on this piece of flash, as I was unsure about it. Thank you Iain, I do value your feedback
Your first line was a great “hook.” I like the whole piece
I am so pleased to read your comment, as I was unsure about the flow and wording of this piece of flash. Thank you so much.
I love the soft lyrical feel to this Michael.
I was so pleased to read your feedback, as I was unsure about this piece of flash, thank you Louise, and congratulations on your new book.
Thanks Michael!
I love both the first line and the last, and agree with Louise ~ lovley lyrical feel.
Thank you Alicia, I am grateful for all the positive comments, as I was unsure about this piece of flash.
I also loved the opening and at the risk of saying what everyone already knows, i really like your use of white sheets as being both the locale of conception but also the pages on which a musical composition can be written. Lovely double entendre!
Thank you Andrea, some music is magical, this week the prompt worked for me,
We all have a song inside us waiting to be sung. Be true to that song. Beautifully written Michael!
Thank you for such kind feedback, I enjoy music, this weeks prompt suited me.
Just the mention of Rado Caroline took me back to when I used to lie in bed every night listening to Johnny Walker before falling asleep. A beautifully written piece Michael.
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So pleased you enjoyed it, really glad to know a fellow Radio Caroline listener,
Simply lovely. “We arrive, we depart. In between play good music.” A wonderful gem of advice in your warm-hearted, thoughtful piece, Michael. I thoroughly enjoyed it, Jilly.
Love the fifth paragraph – sound advice for everyone, not just musicians.
Thank you Ellie, I do believe in mending if I able. I would have loved to compose music.
When Fridays arrive let the words tell your stories…love that!
Thank you Dawn, I was pleased myself when that line appeared on the page.
Lovely poetic feel to this piece.
Thank you so much Lisarey.
You really took us there with this one Michael, well done
I was grateful for all the positive comments, as I was unsure about this piece of flash. Thank you Michael
“We arrive, we depart. In between play good music.” A very lyrical feel! =)
Thank you Brenda, my old school teachers would be surprised, I had not an ounce of lyrical ability as a child
Hard to believe, Michael. =)