A writer on holiday
Sometimes one will come across a companion when dining. Today that occurred. I was enjoying my morning coffee, sat in a cafe with my feet up when a girl walked in. Nothing unusual, I hear you say. Well perhaps. But if you could have seen her. Head held high, her dress filthy, whilst her hair was thick with river mud and tangled with flotsam. But she entered the cafe as if she had not a care in the world. But I saw the torn nails and blood stained legs. ‘Would I buy her a drink’.
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Sounds like she could use one.
This story grew out of a chance meeting that occurred between myself and a tribal princess!!!
hell, yes
To true, and I did. Thank you Neil
She does need a drink.
Hope she feels better.
She certainly needed a drink, then help to return to her family. This story developed from a chance meeting between myself and a princess !
Maybe a pastry too?
There was no pastry’s at this cafe: but it was a safe place that encourged independence !
She needs more than a drink…
That is true Dale. Although the story is total fiction. I did know the young lady, and I brought her coffee.
Nice.
So very nice.
Dear Michael,
Perhaps he should buy her drinks, dinner and a bath.
Questions…”dinning?” “was sat?”
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle, I will correct ‘dinning’. In my defence at the time I was writing and posting this story, I had very limited time available to access the Internet to post my story… Unfortunately ‘was sat’ shows my rural roots. I have now rephrased that also. and in so doing reduced my word count. Thank you again Rochelle. Mike
That’s intriguing Michael – what on hearth has happened to her? Maybe he’ll learn more over a drink?
Thank you Lynn, A writer must always listen. Occasionally that’s how stories start. She was running from a rival tribe, who wanted to abduct her, she took to the river to escape them.
She needs to keep on running …
I enjoyed reading this story because you left me with so much to ponder! The characters were really well drawn! Well done.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
Thank you so much Susan. It perhaps helped that the characters were real individuals. I thank heavens that the story was fictional.
A woman of great courage, I think. There’s a lot more to know about her past and her future. This would make a great opening for a novel!
Thank you so much Penny, I think you are right about it being the start for a novel. In fact as I write this comment, I have started to see how I might incorporate some part of the story into another novella that I am planning. Thank you again. Mike
Like Penny said, a woman of great courage. Definitely in need of a good meal, maybe a hot bath and a little pampering to boot. Maybe even a pollyanna story just beginning… Love it!
Jelli, I hope you are feeling much better. I am glad that you enjoyed this story, Penny’s comment has sparked an idea in my mind as to how I might incorporate some of this piece of flash into a novella that I am planning to write. Thank you once again for commenting, it is appreciated. Mike
Go for it, Michael! I think it would make a great larger story.
She’s a fighter and a keeper. An interesting read.
That is kind of you to say, thank you James.
Sounds like she needs something stronger than coffee! Nice one Michael.
She started with clean water. But I have a feeling that then maybe a ‘local’ spirit might be appropriate
She needs a champion as well as a drink. Although it does seem as if she handled whatever happened.
She has temporarily escaped those who were attempting to kidnap her. But she now needs help from the writer, they will have to figure out how she can stay safe.
Which drink exactly
Water I hope she needs to keep a clear head.
You left me wondering what happened to this poor woman. Nicely done.
I left myself wondering that also. Thank you Alicia
I too would. Perfect flash.
It is kind of you to say that, thank you yarnspinnerr
Sounds like she really needed that drink and some ears to hear her story. Nice snippet from the writer’s life, Michael.
Thank you Norma. This writer hopes to incorporate her story at some point into a novella. Mike
That sounds like a good idea, Mike. 🙂
I am pleased that the protagonist didnt retreat from her but offered to help. Good one Michael 🙂
Thank you Dahlia. With this story I wanted to break the limit of a hundred words.
This is such a tantalising opener, leaving us wondering how she got into that state. Well done.
Thank you Sarah, With this story at the time I did want to say more.
I would buy her a full breakfast… sounds like she needs it.
Thank you Bjorn. There are times when it is the right thing to do.