A Bike for Holly
Softened by wood and green lichen it might be, but the bridge was no path to freedom. Yes there was the presence of nettles and leaf covered shrubbery at each end, but in reality each estate was just as grim as the other. On the two estates gangs ran riot, unemployment was the norm and drug use was common. The bridge just linked one hell with another.
Tony’s motor bike had a broken silencer, everyone knew when he was out and about. His job as a gang courier gave him some freedom till the day he was shot. Now Holly rides his bike.
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Maybe it pays to fix one’s bike – especially in the neighborhood you’ve painted.
I thought that, but Holly says the sound is her calling card. That its hard like her. but I am not sure that is really true.
Very evocative, great take on the prompt. The world you’ve created could be a great setting for a longer piece.
Thank you Iain. I would love to develop this story, but I would need to spend time on the estates, which would fill me with concern.
Dear Michael,
Love the line about the bridge linking one hell to another. Atmospheric and evocative.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle, I really do value the feed back this week. mike
Great atmosphere, the descriptions are so vivid, I can see these kids roaming about. Great writing.
Thank you, I am very grateful for your positive support this week. I was unsure about the approach I took with this story. I had rewritten the posted story several times.
You did great.
Thank you so much.
I, too, liked the line about the bridge linking the two hells… so scarily real.
Thank you Dale, seeing feed back really helps.
Very vivid. I can well imagine the scenario.
Thank you Sandra, I am really pleased to receive your feedback
Bridge between two hells – eeks!
Eeks, that thats what i thought when i saw the photograph of the bridge, for it delivered memories of crossing such a bridge!
Wow a nicely told story that is all to real. I felt my heart lurch when I realized the implication of Holly having the bike.
I am so pleased that the implications for Holly came across. Thank you very much for commenting. Mike
Very evocative take on the prompt, I saw two rival estates at each end of the bridge but couldn’t develop the idea as you’ve have, well done
Thank you Michael, I was fortunate the motorbike section arrived from being assaulted by the sound of a broken motorbike silencer on the morning that I wrote about Holly. I do enjoy being able to incorporate the events that occur around me. But I did hope that Billy might regain his sight, man up and take down the Werewolf.