So be it
“Times are hard mam”.
“So they be, but I want my dosh girl”.
“ don’t worry, Yo’r get it tonight, the big man pays plenty of bucks”.
“he does, but watch yourself, don’t let him try to get on top of you, he’d flatten you for good”.
Laughter
“That’s why he needs me, he can’t do it with his missis”.
Footnote: Genre: Risqué.
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An intriguing piece, Michael. I really wanted to see this continue, the understand what emotions bound those two together
Perhaps one day, the rest of the story may follow.
Very interesting.
I am pleased to hear that. Thank you.
An intriguing snippet of an overheard conversation.
Why thank you Iain, I am trying to be alittle bit more experimental in my writing
Dear Michael,
Just from the snippet of conversation you’ve managed to draw clear characters. I could see and hear them. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Then I am pleased Rochelle. I am learning from the posts of others on FRiday Fictioneers, as well as trying to be more experimental in my writing.
I like the way they are talking in a matter-of-fact voice, despite the topic. I’d love to read more of this, Michael.
Thank you Varad, perhaps one day I will tell more.
It may not be the career of choice but I like the way you’ve included an atmosphere of humour around the conversation that takes the edge off the desperate situation.
I am so pleased to read this comment, thank you Edith.
Such a good title, too!
Accepting the circumstances and trying to survive best way they can. You have a gift for writing such scenes. Your characters are real.
What a kind and thoughtful comment, thank you.
Excellent writing. You’ve done well in catching the tone of women talking about sex, which is distinctively different from the way men talk about it. And you’ve given us a very deft, economical sketch of the characters of the two women.
Such kind feedback, thank you, Penny.
A well done scene with dialect that made me think of some very well known works out there that I may be reading at the moment!
Thank you Russell, when I starting writing this piece the madam was a male pimp, ‘twas purely out of my head !
Thank you Russell, when I started writing this the madam was a male pimp. ‘twas purely out of my head !
Sex and money, always a good mix for a story. Great characterisation, Michael.
Good to hear that the characters came across, at the present time I am attempting to experiment with my writing. Thank you Fatima,
Ha ha ha , risqué indeed.
Pleased to hear you laugh, as at present I am experimenting with my writing. I was unsure how this piece of flash would come across.
Really interesting – at least they seem to be the ones in control.
They are in control so far, but there might be a possible sequel, if only I dare to write it.
Very well done, Michael! We can definitely see what’s going on and want to know more.
Pleased to hear from you Dale. So far Sussy has not given me permission to post more, even though a sequel, of sorts, has been written. I am going to try and turn it into dialogue that is acceptable to her.
Pleased to hear from you Dale. So far Sussy has not given me permission to post more, even though a sequel of sorts, has been written. I am going to try and turn it into dialogue that is acceptable to her.
Nice back and forth, chummy as well as advisory, but definitely focussed on making a buck, practicing the oldest profession.
Thank you, I am never comfortable writing dialogue, so your comment is most welcome.
Really good dialogue, even if I don’t know what (embarrassingly) what dosh is. Like the experimentation Michael.
Thank you Susan, I am not comfortable writing dialogue, but I am determined to test myself. Sorry about that word ‘dosh’, it is not a term that I like.
Great story, tell us more!!
I will if I can get the dialogue right. My regards to Mr Dumty, do tell him that such behaviour leads to blindness.
Is that a scientific fact?
I could be for Mr Dumpty
I almost skipped this because of the risqué note- but this was in great taste – true to life in a way and glad he pays big bucks – lol
So pleased to read your feedback, thank you.
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A short and unsweet sea shanty that wasn’t. Nicely put together misdirection.
Thank you Kelvin I guess that such conversations were common in sea ports when the big clippers turned up at familiar ports.
Great voices, and a tight little snippet on the things some people risk to earn money.
Thank you so much Sarah Ann, I hope sometime to post a follow up to this snippet of conversation if I can find the right dialogue.
Again, superb job with your dialogue. You created a clear scene and solid characters with so few words. (BTW … I said last week I’d try more dialogue and ‘chickened’ out this week … maybe next!) Have a nice weekend! =)
Thank you so much Brenda, I am hoping to follow up up this weeks post, with more dialogue, if I can find the right words. It will be a challenge. I think that dialogue only turns up occasionally, your turn will arrive, when the right prompt turns up.
I’ll wait ’til the photo prompt prompts me. =)
Thanks, Michael. I’ll wait for the photo prompt to prompt me! =)
Ooops…sorry for sending this twice. I couldn’t tell when the first one sent (haha). Heavy sigh!
I do the same, it being human, so no sigh needed.