The Revenge of the Path
Abbot Ambrose wondered whether he had made the right choice, certainly the bill for washing the monks habits was much reduced. The new path to the bathing pool had lifted the monks above the marshy path. But at what cost? As each plank had been nailed down a thin trace of blood was seen.
Rumours started that the blood belonged to a novice who had been found bleeding in the refectory. Indeed it was the old planks from the refectory that had been used to create the path to the pool.
No monk would use the path, so the Abbot said he would lead the monks to the pool. As the Abbot stepped upon the path it spilt asunder, dropping the Abbot into the mire. As the Abbot called for help the mire turned a rusty red, sucking the Abbot downwards. Brother Jude stepped forwards and took the Abbots confession. From that moment the blood disappeared. Whilst the abbot was placed in an Anchorite Cell for the rest of his life.
Footnote: This was a story that I did not want to write, but it would not go away until I did…
I quite love this actually. I good horror story is nice once and a while. I enjoyed the story behind the gruesome ending and feel bad for the poor Abbott, but I guess he didn’t have horror movies to look back on and know what was coming. Great story 🙂
I was pleased to read your comment, the abbots confession condemned him to a life of servitude.
Oh wow!
Skipton’s medieval parish church has an Anchorite Cell, which got me thinking about why and who would occupy such a cell.
Indeed!
A good gothic horror!
This little ray of gothic horror surprised me. For I don’t do horror.
I was a little confused by the Abbot being pulled downward but surviving to live out his natural life. I also feel this could be a great gothic tale. I am glad you wrote it.
Thank you Susan. The abbot was condemned for harming the novice, to live in servitude in a Anchorites Cell. In my first draft of this story the abbot did not survive.
A good experiment with horror Michael, and I understand what you are saying. That is why I firmly believe that stories have a life of their own, we are mere conduits 🙂
This story certainly had me feeling like a conduit. I do not often read horror stories. Thank you for your feedback, it was appreciated.
kaykuala
Brother Jude stepped forwards
and took the Abbots confession.
Pretty obvious the Abbot had a lot to do with the novice’s demise. Love this kind of twist amazingly done within confines of a a few words!
Hank
Thank you Hank