Beauty and the Beast
There is a certain beauty on a late spring day, a gentle breeze ruffles my hair, the warmth of the sun baths me. I wonder do you see the beauty that lays around us. I sit back and enjoy my coffee, whilst you rest at my feet. Later we amble homeward, you make me stop, rush not is your mantra.
Then the beast arrived, a pounding headache, a spinning room. I rest until the night sky calls to me. A breeze returns to rustle the leafs, the crescent moon looks down upon us. A star falls. Our time is passing.
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Poignant, Michael. There’s a mixture of past and present tenses in this that you can easily fix. Also you have leafs instead of leaves.
Thank you Neal, have changed the word Leaf to Leaves. I will struggle with the tenses.
I can’t tell you how much I admire those of you who can write to beautifully in what is not your native language. My hat’s off to you.
Over recent years I have studied the differing ways of recording historic languages. A fascinating subject for me. I really admire those individuals who can work with differing languages. It is a skill I definately do not have. But there are other gifts.
I’m always reluctant to point out grammatical glitches, but the English teacher in me is very thankful when some other brave soul does so 🙂
Poor grammar has always been my companion, but it is offset by other gifts. I have learnt to really value any help given. Please always feel free to mention if I make an mistakes. I rarely bite
Heart-rending!
It was a disturbing event, and could have turned very nasty. Humanity has still a lot to learn about how the temper aggression.
Such a lot of quiet emotion in this, Michael. Even the beast falls quietly, like a star.
A poetic way to describe difficult events, Michael. Nicely done
Thank you Lynn,
Very poignant story. Rush not should be widely accepted mantra.
“There is a certain beauty on a late spring day, a gentle breeze ruffles my hair, the warmth of the sun baths me. I wonder do you see the beauty that lays around us. I sit back and enjoy my coffee, whilst you rest at my feet. Later we amble homeward, you make me stop, rush not is your mantra.”
I hope this helps. 😉
Thank you so much, I alway appreciate feedback. I can not believe the mistakes that I made, Mike
I was there too many times. 🙂 Was glad I could offer some help.
It was appreciated
Great descriptions Michael.
It was a great day, despite what ever caused me feel unwell. The colour in the night sky was especially fine.
I love your imagery, Michael.
I am so pleased to see your comment. Thank you Rosemary.
Very well written , Michael .
Thank you Moon
Hi Michael,
Enjoyed catching up for another week. It’s now officially Winter here and we Australians are a grumbling bunch when it comes to the cold. Most of us are also wary of turning on heaters with the astronomical electricity bills. I’ve just returned from the shops with a pulled pork pie and dessert after a torturous morning cleaning my daughter’s room.
So, I was delighted to relax while reading your flash and I’ve read it through a few times and find quite a few different possible interpretations. I am wondering whether your companion is a dog in the story? We have two much loved dogs here and they seem to spend most of their walks sniffing, even though my physio instructs me to walk fast to raise my heart rate.
Hope you enjoy the rest of your week.
xx Rowena
Hi Rowena. Winter I once loved it; but here like with you, with the extortionately high heating costs many people fear winter. As for daughters or sons their rooms often take on a life of their own. My companion was a collie, as I sit writing this he has his feet up in the best armchair in the house. Sadly for him when we go out walking, I am getting slower. I am only glad that your physio is not behind me.
I love your sense of humour, Michael. A friend of mine has two old Border collies and she’d walk the dogs with the kids to school. One of the dogs was about 14 or 16 and had lost a leg but in typical border collie style, insisted on his walk and laboured along.
The physio will be having a chat with me when I see her next. I have missed a few days due to the cold. No doubt her logic would be that walking would heat me up. To her credit, I have lost a noticeable amount of weight.
I enjoy walking, I trust that you have some interesting places to walk, that have a great coffee or tea shop on route.
Michael, just found the photos of your Border Collie and particularly loved the photo of him in the hat. We have a full Border Collie, Bilbo, who is now 10.5 years and Lady who is a BC x Cavalier. BCs are a fabulous dog. Bilbo is now elderly but throw the ball down at the beach and he almost goes like a pup.
xx Rowena
Rowena, most of my collies loved nothing better than chasing a ball. A long time ago I left one enjoying himself, he was fielding at my children’s cricket match. It was a big mistake, as he / the collie, worn his pads right down. He had to wear special leather boots for a while to allow his pads to recover! Mike
Mike, that definitely sounds like a border collie. Doesn’t know when to stop. A friend of mine took ours to play cricket with her kids and he was good at fielding too.
At the moment, he is a very smuggly lap warmer. It doesn’t get as cold here but we’re not built for the heat. I can’t remember where we stashed the heater so I’ve got a rug and the dog. xx Rowena
Having a rug handy is always a good idea. They keep you warm in winter, and for me also encourage me to remember that when spring arrives I can go picnicking with them.
Great imagery and description and you captured a particular moment or moments very well. Imbuing them with a lot of meaning and emotion
Thank you Michael, the day just shouted out to be written about. I am so glad that I did now put pen to paper.
Clever, interesting and a great read. Excellent.
Cast Aside – a very short story
Thank you Keith, writing this story helped me get away from the beast that caused me to feel unwell. Although I did make quite a few mistakes with my grammar. Now hopefully corrected
I viewed the beast as a migraine headache. I know several people who suffer from those. Very descriptive.
Thank you Russell, migraines are really bad, I think what affected me that day was viral. What ever writing about it helped me a lot
Loved your last line. It is so true.
As I get older I find myself wondering about time. For me the only real time is the natural turning of the earth. I remember thinking as a child that time only existed in my home…
True. The times relativity is often best experienced as one gets older.
Thank you.
I thought of the beast as a terrible migraine. Particularly liked the vivid imagery.
I think that my experience of the migraine like headache, heightened my awareness of my surroundings. I then felt the need to record my experience. Rather like a artist who records a dramatic sunset.
Dear Michael,
Poignant and touching. I could feel the gentle breeze. I get migraines and they really are the beast. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
Hi Rochelle. With any beast, being able to control it is important. I turn to nature for help amongst other things, hence this story.
Wonderful writing. Great imagery.
Thank you for your kind comments.
For me, that beast comes on a hot sunny day, though I’ve not suffered one in quite some time. Well written
Thank you so much for commenting, I read and enjoyed ‘Bear with Me’ it is the kind of story that I enjoy. I will watch out for hot sunny days.
An idyllic start with a not so idyllic end. I love the description of the spring evening.
It was one of those days, to get it out of my head I had to record it. thank you for taking the time to comment. mike
You really painted a beautiful picture with your words! I enjoyed this! Nan
Thank you so much Nan, I enjoyed the day in spite of the virus that gave me such a lousy headache.
I love the description in this. Well done.